(Life by) Eloise,
your post raised several intriguing questions that I would like to pursue further. For example, when you said that we essentially come into this world alone and leave it in solitude, I wondered how that is so. Perhaps you could elaborate on this idea when appropriate to the subject matter. I also wondered what you meant by "TIME ENDS"...I think you could have clarified your meaning a little, because this idea is an essential aspect of death and perspectives of it. Perhaps you meant that OUR time ends eventually, or that the way people think of time is inconstant, or that actual time ends? Do you truly believe that people have been dreading their respective demises since the beginning of time? do you think this is true of all cultures? Although I should take my own advice on this, I suggest trying not to use cliches if they are not completely suited to what you want the reader to interpret.
I also recommend typing your blog on Word, using spell check, asking someone to proofread your blog or read it aloud yourself, and then post it. (I'm pretty sure you meant mental illness, not "metal illness", but you don't want to leave the reader guessing.)
Thank you for sharing your experiences with your family; I can tell that they are very precious to you and vice versa.
your post raised several intriguing questions that I would like to pursue further. For example, when you said that we essentially come into this world alone and leave it in solitude, I wondered how that is so. Perhaps you could elaborate on this idea when appropriate to the subject matter. I also wondered what you meant by "TIME ENDS"...I think you could have clarified your meaning a little, because this idea is an essential aspect of death and perspectives of it. Perhaps you meant that OUR time ends eventually, or that the way people think of time is inconstant, or that actual time ends? Do you truly believe that people have been dreading their respective demises since the beginning of time? do you think this is true of all cultures? Although I should take my own advice on this, I suggest trying not to use cliches if they are not completely suited to what you want the reader to interpret.
I also recommend typing your blog on Word, using spell check, asking someone to proofread your blog or read it aloud yourself, and then post it. (I'm pretty sure you meant mental illness, not "metal illness", but you don't want to leave the reader guessing.)
Thank you for sharing your experiences with your family; I can tell that they are very precious to you and vice versa.
(Thanksgiving by) Eloise,
I found this post very interesting. I especially liked your insight about photography, and how the reason for picture-taking obsessions is potentially fear. I too have noticed that people are sometimes so afraid to die that they document every moment, but they forget to live.
I didn't really understand your explanation of the game, but the description was a valiant effort =)
Your last sentence is touching, but it could be even more so if it was worded more clearly. "half fill the space empty" was slightly awkward to me...perhaps "the space that his abscence left empty" or "half fill the void of his absence" instead?
Nicely done! Your family and friends sound like wonderful company!
I found this post very interesting. I especially liked your insight about photography, and how the reason for picture-taking obsessions is potentially fear. I too have noticed that people are sometimes so afraid to die that they document every moment, but they forget to live.
I didn't really understand your explanation of the game, but the description was a valiant effort =)
Your last sentence is touching, but it could be even more so if it was worded more clearly. "half fill the space empty" was slightly awkward to me...perhaps "the space that his abscence left empty" or "half fill the void of his absence" instead?
Nicely done! Your family and friends sound like wonderful company!
Eloise,
I'm sad to hear about your uncle. That was clearly very rough to go through. I agree about what you said regarding the hospital - they are very uninviting, yet common places to die. I'd be interested to know what you learn about reincarnation in the future, if you research it. I liked the way you described souls as an "energy". I'd never thought about it that way before.
I suggest proofreading your work and having someone else also do so if possible, because it would have been easier and more enjoyable to read if there were not so many spelling and grammatical errors. Good job!
I'm sad to hear about your uncle. That was clearly very rough to go through. I agree about what you said regarding the hospital - they are very uninviting, yet common places to die. I'd be interested to know what you learn about reincarnation in the future, if you research it. I liked the way you described souls as an "energy". I'd never thought about it that way before.
I suggest proofreading your work and having someone else also do so if possible, because it would have been easier and more enjoyable to read if there were not so many spelling and grammatical errors. Good job!
Eloise,
I wish someone had thought to tape it for you.
Evan,
I did sometimes wonder what you were thinking in your mother's presentation, and why you sometimes smiled a bit. I think everyone does have an inherent desire to be heard...sometimes silence can be like shell, a burden. Perhaps you could have elaborated on the "deepest, most painful realms of my thoughts", because it would help the reader to understand your story further. I admire the way you continue to handle this episode with such grace.
I wish someone had thought to tape it for you.
Evan,
I did sometimes wonder what you were thinking in your mother's presentation, and why you sometimes smiled a bit. I think everyone does have an inherent desire to be heard...sometimes silence can be like shell, a burden. Perhaps you could have elaborated on the "deepest, most painful realms of my thoughts", because it would help the reader to understand your story further. I admire the way you continue to handle this episode with such grace.
Evan,
Thank you for discussing this yet again in a post. You must be very tired of talking about this experience. My favorite line was, "In the end, holistic ways may keep our minds and fortitude alive and well, but there is no denying that in most cases allopathic ways keep our bodies alive, which are essential." I think this is insightful because it helps get to the root of why people sometimes choose one method or the other. I found this quote to be lovely because I've often pondered the psychological implications of someone going to an extreme on the spectrum of allopathic vs. holistic
Thank you for discussing this yet again in a post. You must be very tired of talking about this experience. My favorite line was, "In the end, holistic ways may keep our minds and fortitude alive and well, but there is no denying that in most cases allopathic ways keep our bodies alive, which are essential." I think this is insightful because it helps get to the root of why people sometimes choose one method or the other. I found this quote to be lovely because I've often pondered the psychological implications of someone going to an extreme on the spectrum of allopathic vs. holistic
Evan,
My favorite sentence in this was, "When I meet new people in an intimate environment I usually find myself trying to make an impression, but instead of one that is illustrative of my pain and suffering I end up creating an image of comedy, like I am silly and do not spend time to contemplate the meaning of illness and dying".
I like this quote because most people feel that way to an extent..people want others to be attracted to their personalities and find that there is something deeper to them (at the same time). Because this quote provides insight to a possible basic social human instinct, and because it has some truth in it, I found it rather beautiful.
I would have been interested to read about how being injured during Thanksgiving festivities affects the experience. Was your brother embarrased, bashful, happy to be the center of attention?
Lovely writing!
My favorite sentence in this was, "When I meet new people in an intimate environment I usually find myself trying to make an impression, but instead of one that is illustrative of my pain and suffering I end up creating an image of comedy, like I am silly and do not spend time to contemplate the meaning of illness and dying".
I like this quote because most people feel that way to an extent..people want others to be attracted to their personalities and find that there is something deeper to them (at the same time). Because this quote provides insight to a possible basic social human instinct, and because it has some truth in it, I found it rather beautiful.
I would have been interested to read about how being injured during Thanksgiving festivities affects the experience. Was your brother embarrased, bashful, happy to be the center of attention?
Lovely writing!
Evan,
how courageous and good of you to share your experiences with others. It encouraged me to cherish people in my own life more. Thank you for sharing that that your father started a new art collection instead of spending the following months of his life in disheartening spirits; how inspiring! Your writing is skilled and articulate.
Well done!
how courageous and good of you to share your experiences with others. It encouraged me to cherish people in my own life more. Thank you for sharing that that your father started a new art collection instead of spending the following months of his life in disheartening spirits; how inspiring! Your writing is skilled and articulate.
Well done!
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